Sadly, rather than fleshing out the story with additional scenes, descriptions, and subplots, ADF instead adds lots and lots of mediocre dialogue to existing scenes, instead.

that's disappointing. he always did so much with the logs.

Also, I do not think I buy Spock and Uhura having any kind of physical relationship prior to the 'lift scene.

i can buy them having a private sexual relationship prior to that scene a hell of a lot easier than i can buy them making out in public on the transport pads. not just because of old series characterisation but beucase of how spock stopped the display of affection in the turbolift as soon as he made it to where he was going and then continued calmly down the corridor.